A Wish

Personal Reflection 1 Minute 
I saw my Grandfather
just after he left
     his body still there
         but his essence
           exhaled through his skin
as though to freedom.

   I took comfort
   in the quiet 
   evaporation
   like he chose 
     to be lighter
     and quieter than air

and to sometimes
condense - 
   kaleidoscope jewels on a glass.
 
When it is my turn
and this jug of flesh
inexplicably pours me out;

I will rise and rise
like him
in wreaths
and mists
to join the faint
vapour trail
of the Milky Way.

Published by abigfatcanofworms

We all walk in the dark. But if we hold hands, perhaps the dark won't be as scary.

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11 thoughts on “A Wish”

      2. Hey… hope you don’t mind answering this. I am doing some work on this poem. I’m wondering whether the reference to the Torii Gate was more confusing than the reference to Shu CHeen Yu or the bark of laughter? It was a list of places where my grandfather’s “essence” might condense. But you only mentioned the Torii Gate so I’m wondering what part of that was distracting?

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  4. glad to comment. I felt like saying something but thought I might come across as a busybody 🙂 the three lines after glass jarred: I had no idea what you were talking about; I could have looked up the references but felt I shouldn’t need to. The problem is you need to jettison those three lines or explain them in the poem but that may overloading a light but shadowy poem

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