I am awake
watching gaps in leaves
seeing woolly mammoths
those creatures
of the past, preserved
in ice and mud
I must not wallow
like them for ten thousand years
but leap up and
shake myself
celebrate the fallen crystals
shattering
about my toes
This is my truth
penned like knife strips
through a canvas sky
That’s okay. I am not sure I do. Originally the ending was incredibly depressing. I tried to lighten it up and it just kind of ran away with me. So I decided to call it abstract and let it be.
I love the line about wallowing for a thousand years. You see in a poem what you want to see, and if it isn’t what the poet intended, well, I’m not sure it matters. The image at the end is very striking.
Thank you. I think you’re right. Art is open to interpretation. And if the artist doesn’t convey exactly what they intended 🤷♀️ (as the French might say. 😉I don’t know if Dauphy agrees.)It’s more about generating a response. Hopefully at least in the direction the artist intended.
That’s true. Sometimes people read far more into my poems than I intended, and I think oh, that’s very clever. Other times people miss what I intended, but seem to enjoy it anyway.
I’ve read this a few times now: there are some striking images, esp the mammoths but I don’t really know what’s going on; sorry
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That’s okay. I am not sure I do. Originally the ending was incredibly depressing. I tried to lighten it up and it just kind of ran away with me. So I decided to call it abstract and let it be.
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I love the line about wallowing for a thousand years. You see in a poem what you want to see, and if it isn’t what the poet intended, well, I’m not sure it matters. The image at the end is very striking.
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Thank you. I think you’re right. Art is open to interpretation. And if the artist doesn’t convey exactly what they intended 🤷♀️ (as the French might say. 😉I don’t know if Dauphy agrees.)It’s more about generating a response. Hopefully at least in the direction the artist intended.
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That’s true. Sometimes people read far more into my poems than I intended, and I think oh, that’s very clever. Other times people miss what I intended, but seem to enjoy it anyway.
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Love this!
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Great! Thank you!
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I enjoy the knife strips and the canvas sky. The ripping and the torn sleep; it doesn’t come easily for me, and sometimes theres a 3:00 am awakening.
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What a great poem. Quite haunting. Brilliant.
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Thank you for reading and glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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