suppose you visit me down here you could discard your mirrors in this unlit cascade this fetish of dirt the rub, the writhe segments and soil the dirt and I we are mutually incorporating - in and out the same simple magnificence
Earthworm
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Twists and turns in a way that attracts and disgusts. Love it!
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I like
“unlit cascade
this fetish of dirt”
It gives the poem an almost party atmosphere.
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Yes. That was kind of the intention. From responses so far, I don’t think the poem has really worked. I wrote it rather quickly. And chemo brain means I am often a bit kooky in my thinking. So it might need a rethink later.
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p.s. I’m not surprised you wrote about worms 🙂
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😂
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Love this! I wouldn’t change anything as it is descriptive and beautifully put.
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Thank you, Carol! ❤️
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amazing: virtually an ode of the earthworm 🙂
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Oh, thanks John! So glad you like it!
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I also expected a ‘worms’ poem given your pen-name, and you didn’t disappoint! The ‘simple magnificence’ of dirt calls to mind Hamlet’s ‘quintessence of dust.’
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I guess I have more of an affinity with worms than I realized. 🙂 I tried for cabbage moths (a lot around at the moment) but found I didn’t have a lot to say.
Dirt is magnificent. It is the beginning and the end of the life cycle. Perhaps that’s why I think worms are so cool.
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I think they are underrated and underestimated! Perhaps because they live beneath us 🙂
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this is such a kids chant about worms, you make them sound both disgusting and exciting!
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Wonderful! I don’t care if earthworms aren’t really capable of thought, this makes me believe they are.
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🙂 Thanks, Jane
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Down to earth excellence! 🙂
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Thanks! 🙂
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👍
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“the dirt and I
we are mutually
incorporating –
in and out the same
simple magnificence”
– I just love the simple brilliance of this
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Oh thank you! People have made lots of nice comments but I wasn’t really sure what they understood from the poem. Your comment feels like I know you know what I was driving at. 😂😂. No offence to others. It’s just one of those things of sending your little baby artling out into the world and letting people interpret it.
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Hey, how did your sermon go? 🤞🤞 For you!!!
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Giving it tomorrow. Need to finish it today. I managed to tone down the toxic positivity tangent, so it is improved, but still needs some work. Thanks for the well wishes and support!
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Oooh… this is wonderful! I love that middle stanza, “the fetish of dirt”
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Thanks, Kate!!
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I absolutely love this! discard your / mirrors in this // unlit cascade …Such a great line.
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Thanks, Bob! 🙂
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“this fetish of dirt / the rub, the writhe” – I could really feel the earthiness in that! 🙂
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🙂
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I’ve always hated worms….maybe from when my dad used to make me put them on the hook at the end of my fishing pole when I was young? Yech!
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Well I always hated fishing. Watching the poor fish jump on the end of the hook made me feel so mean. I guess putting worms on hooks is no kinder. I really should be vegetarian.
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Worms have always intrigued me, and I learned very early how good they were for the soil, but I do remember that I never took the challenge from the other boys to eat one.
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I don’t recommend starting now.
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