A zejel written for Grace’s dVerse poetry form prompt: “
The elements of the simplest and most common form of the Zéjel are:
- syllabic, most often written in 8 syllable lines.
- stanzaic, opening with a mono-rhymed triplet followed by any number of quatrains.
- rhymed, the rhyme of the opening mudanza establishes a linking rhyme with the end line of the succeeding quatrains. Rhyme scheme, aaa bbba ccca etc.“
We see oceans from water’s crest eyes long blind to their living depth. Trees seen as trunks, all but topless. Like mice who think of us as toes it takes a greater mind to know that much beyond our eyesight flows including aches we can’t redress. I find I’m just one fathom deep but even so there’s things I keep out of view of vision’s brisk sweep - eyes superficially impressed Trying to look past eye level - even when waves the view dishevel, or leaves dance, opaquely wrestle - curious science does it best.
I really like this. We only see a small sliver of the light spectrum. There’s such a big world out there, it’s good to acknowledge that.
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Thanks, Bob! I am glad you like it. The rhymes really mutate how I say things.
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My bad if I read it wrong.
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No you didn’t at all.
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I think the imperfect rhymes work really well👍🙂
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Thank you. 🙂
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Beautiful. These viewpoints give me new perspective. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you! 🙂
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Well done, Worms. This form is a tough one imo.
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I agree. It was a tough one.
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Another fantastic write up. Thanks for this. Love it. (Economizing on words as I went too long before. Forgive).
Lovely Zéjel.
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Many thanks. So glad you like it.
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