thunder scraped its knees
across sky boulders
i heard it coming
cracked along by
lightning’s febrile lash
I saw light flung sideways
from the garage
it yellowed the carpet
and prickled to glitter
the dust on your keyboard
while you sandbagged
ready for the rain
I slept anyway
perversely oblivious
to the threat, this flogged night
this works from the get -go: surprising but relatable imagery; love ‘lightning’s febrile lash’ and this ‘flogged night’: brilliant: short and throbbing with violence !!!
To be honest Mr Worms wasn’t sandbagging either. But our garage has flooded 3 times this year and he was rearranging a few things which might be badly affected if it happened again. The drainage just wasn’t considered very carefully when it was built and this year has shown all the cracks, so to speak.
Oh I love this! Wonderful descriptions. We’re flooded in today – creek across the road at a low culvert. Fortunately the house is on the side of a hill so we’re fine. I just wish we had more tanks to be catching all this!
Yes! My parents had 152mm up to 9am this morning. They keep records for the BOM. They’re flooded in too with guests. LOL. Not even the tractor will get this lot out.
These thunder storms have been quite incredible – so loud and sudden! It does sound like its banging against sky boulders – a great description that will stay with me.
this works from the get -go: surprising but relatable imagery; love ‘lightning’s febrile lash’ and this ‘flogged night’: brilliant: short and throbbing with violence !!!
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Thanks, John! So glad it worked. I
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I’m copying it right now in my commonplace book; not a word redundant or out of place —
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I am honoured!
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yes, it’s up there with ‘Nimmitabel’ though it’s quite a different poem —
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That was my 1am 🙂
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were you the sleeper or the sandbagger? 🙂
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I was the one who woke with a huge flash of light and a simultaneous KABOOM of thunder. No need to sandbag here in the mountains 🙂
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To be honest Mr Worms wasn’t sandbagging either. But our garage has flooded 3 times this year and he was rearranging a few things which might be badly affected if it happened again. The drainage just wasn’t considered very carefully when it was built and this year has shown all the cracks, so to speak.
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Three time in one year can be a bit tedious. I bet there isn’t an easy solution either
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Not very. It’s been a nutsy year. We will probably get there.
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Love this. Especially the first line.
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Thanks, Bob!
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Lightening, thunder, and flogging. Yes, absolutely. Perfect description.
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Thanks, Misky! 😊
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Flogged night, perfect! There is a real battening down of the hatches feel to this one.
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Thanks Hobbo!
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Always welcome, Worms.
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Oh I love this! Wonderful descriptions. We’re flooded in today – creek across the road at a low culvert. Fortunately the house is on the side of a hill so we’re fine. I just wish we had more tanks to be catching all this!
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Yes! My parents had 152mm up to 9am this morning. They keep records for the BOM. They’re flooded in too with guests. LOL. Not even the tractor will get this lot out.
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And thank you! 😊
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Being flooded in with guests could be quite challenging 😀
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These thunder storms have been quite incredible – so loud and sudden! It does sound like its banging against sky boulders – a great description that will stay with me.
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Thanks Suzanne! 🙂
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