the night

abigfatcanofworms Personal Reflection February 8, 2022February 8, 2022 1 Minute

the moon has drawn
your smile in the sky
but your eyes
are not in the stars
except perhaps
that tangled galaxy
yesterday by the bush track
roaming among dandelions 
such blue candour

but now
the night is piebald
inside two eyelids
are puddled mirages
ricocheting memory
your laughter
i wake rattled
dumped by shock waves
and you’re gone

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Published February 8, 2022February 8, 2022

15 thoughts on “the night”

Reflections of an Untidy Mind says:

February 8, 2022 at 7:11 pm

That was very gritty. Visceral is the popular term but it certainly fits.

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1. abigfatcanofworms says:
  
  February 8, 2022 at 8:47 pm
  
  Not sure I understand your meaning. What fits? Visceral?
  
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  1. Reflections of an Untidy Mind says:
    
    February 8, 2022 at 10:48 pm
    
    Yep. It really twisted.
    
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  2. abigfatcanofworms says:
    
    February 8, 2022 at 10:52 pm
    
    Okay. Good. Thanks!
    
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Hobbo says:

February 8, 2022 at 8:21 pm

Gritty sheets stuck in my mind too! 😂

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1. abigfatcanofworms says:
  
  February 8, 2022 at 8:45 pm
  
  Sorry, I’m confused. You want visceral sheets?
  
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  1. Hobbo says:
    
    February 8, 2022 at 9:54 pm
    
    Mmm. Don’t think so. I’ll get back to you if I change my mind/ 😂
    
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Misky says:

February 9, 2022 at 4:37 am

I love that word piebald. I must find a way to use it soon. Before I forget 😂

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1. abigfatcanofworms says:
  
  February 9, 2022 at 6:25 am
  
  I know it from horses.
  
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  1. Misky says:
    
    February 9, 2022 at 6:27 am
    
    I don’t get on with horses. I fall off, and break bits of myself. 😂
    
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  2. abigfatcanofworms says:
    
    February 9, 2022 at 6:31 am
    
    Yes. I have fallen off too. And yet I come away from horses feeling mended. 🙂
    
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  3. Misky says:
    
    February 9, 2022 at 7:05 am
    
    I also fall off bicycles, which is why Mr M sold my bike. 😂😂
    
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K.Hartless says:

February 9, 2022 at 2:31 pm

Delightful that smile.

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1. abigfatcanofworms says:
  
  February 10, 2022 at 9:23 pm
  
  Thanks!
  
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Roshni Ramanan says:

March 7, 2022 at 9:40 pm

Lovely write. I appreciated the flow from the moonlit smiles to the shock waves. Good luck!

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