
Rush Hour
6pm crowds into the station // wasps to a nest // huddle of bodies // brunt-warm the smell // stressed rubber undertoned by grease // noise of rushing, crushing wind
the black tunnel breathes
rails hum and wheels screech // “please stand behind the yellow line” // the PA is demanding // and so the bright beast hurls itself amongst 6pm // fraudulent with colour // incredulous, white and hissing
6pm pushes forward now // loafing and massing // oozing and swaying
and then there’s silence like a pre-yawn gaping
6pm pauses, knocker-straight // stares at a door jammed open // mower parked and vehemently silent
sees “mountfield” // a broody black catcher // an army backpack slumped unconscious // and silence unravels
6pm screams
fraught with heads and bedazzled sound // the escalator’s a lurching caterpillar // floor tom “bomb bomb bomb” // crashing barriers // the thunder of fear
people in uniform reach for phones // press red buttons // think to take videos
6pm hits the news // it’s well before seven
Excellent Worms! 👏👏👌👌It was wonderfully descriptive and maintained the tension throughout!
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Thanks so much, Ken!
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I wonder how many of those published this month will include bombs.
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Yes. I must admit I read yours, realised what it was, and felt I had to write mine immediately to stay within the 1 hour rule but I was afraid of being heavily influenced by yours.
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Read the first one by Eloise Grills. It’s fantastic.
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Excellent 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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