Kyphosis

abigfatcanofworms Uncategorized September 29, 2022September 29, 2022 1 Minute

The carers recommend walks
and so she watches
the passing of concrete
beneath feet and stick.

Her brown cardigan
cranked to arching
and her free hand 
behind her hip

trying to fend off 
pain’s whorls.
On the path
a tumbled camellia

bends its colour
to every foot...
she remembers 
dancing with Charlie

Written for Twiglet #298 “a bare hill”

Published by abigfatcanofworms

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Published September 29, 2022September 29, 2022

8 thoughts on “Kyphosis”

K.Hartless says:

September 29, 2022 at 1:34 pm

You’ve captured the suffering and the struggle so well on this piece. The labored movement is impactful.

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johnlmalone says:

September 29, 2022 at 4:29 pm

I like this one very much, Worms; I love the compassionate characterization, the struggle and achievement of movement, and that memory the camellia evokes — there’s a whole story to be told here ; haunting —

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1. abigfatcanofworms says:
  
  September 29, 2022 at 6:46 pm
  
  Thank you, John!
  
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Sunra Rainz says:

September 29, 2022 at 7:02 pm

I love the ending, it makes me want to know more about Charlie. And “Pain’s whorls” is a great description.

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Misky says:

September 29, 2022 at 7:19 pm

An exceptional poem.

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1. abigfatcanofworms says:
  
  September 29, 2022 at 7:21 pm
  
  Thank you, Misky!
  
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Bob says:

September 29, 2022 at 11:38 pm

Love this! As always your endings are the best.

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1. abigfatcanofworms says:
  
  September 30, 2022 at 6:58 am
  
  Thank you so much, Bob. A truly lovely comment to receive!
  
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