Written for the Ragtag Daily Prompt – March 5th- “intransitive”
At this hour the shadows are manicured as the lawns; even the leaves hang in brushed stillness like choir robes before the song begins. Gangs of cockatoos, chromium glinting, roar in unison down the ripped, sycamore, sky. At this hour thunder is a footnote to the kettle-hum rain. He rolls dough; lines of cookies strut across papered pans and I sit by the window smelling the earth cooling. And I wonder: when did dripping get so intransitive; flinging down songlines under a walnut, disco, sky
Wonderful. Really put me in the moment. You have such unique images. And the last line is amazing.
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Thanks so much Bob. I so appreciate your comments. 🙂
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I really like how you insert yourself into this scene. It sets the reader into the same scenery as you.
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Thanks, Misky!
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you’ve captured the scene well —
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Thanks, John. Intransitive was certainly an odd word to try and throw in.
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that’s what’s interesting about your poetry; Worms; you take risks adding a little frisson for the reader —
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I love what you did here with the, three, words!
–Shay
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