written for NaPoWriMo Day 5. (introduce apparently inappropriate laughter into a “dark” poem)
On the concrete driveway he’s still where the ladder flung him. A pair of green secateurs lie three metres off and the cat too, wanting to be fed. Morning seems to graze him — scratchy footsteps and the scuttering of light The red smear on his lips rests gently — heart’s juice and bubbles. How long is it since night withdrew - since the sail-away moon cloaked itself in lavender and danced and since the stars slowly moved away? He remembers fingerling suns baring pale arms and hugging the Earth but never quite touching him - his pain like a shield from their warmth. A little girl says "Look Mummy! A pussy cat!" and he rouses, tries to call for help but his voice is weak and nearby the kookaburras are laughing.
You aced the intent of the prompt. Well done!!!
–Shay
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Thanks, Shay!
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a masterpiece of compression, a violent vignette ! this is how my friend died, how he was found. You aced this one, Worms !!! going straight into my commonplace book —
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Wow. Really? How awful. So sorry, John!
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thanks, Worms; your poem is perfect ; no fumbling, no awkwardness; was it written in a rush or composed over some time ?
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I wrote it in little more than an hour after taking the kids to a show last night. It evolves entirely out of seeing a man lying on his driveway talking on the phone as we headed to the theatre.
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that is amazing; thanks 🙂
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Wow. Poignant. And beautifully told.
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Thanks so much, Bob
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I find a massive stillness around this. It stops and leaves me standing on the edge of the incident. Or observing from a height. The laughter of the kookaburras is chilling. Wow. Brilliantly told.
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Thanks so much!
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A scary moment eloquently captured. Huge fan of that lavender moon.
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Thanks, K
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